Showing posts with label book. Show all posts
Showing posts with label book. Show all posts

Saturday, 6 October 2012

Chpt. 10 of my free Sci-Fi Fantasy Story - Don't Shoot the Messenger

Here are the previous chapters to the best fantasy book since The Last King of Shambhala (available at any good online book store):
Chapter 1   Chapter 2   Chapter 3   Chapter 4   Chapter 5   Chapter 6 Chapter 7 Chapter 8 Chapter 9

A 'standing room only' crowd squished into the town square. They stretched their necks up to see Yēšûă as he arrived with his followers and camels.

Jude, Irene and the team mingled within the crowd, trying to weave their way to the front.

When Yēšûă eventually came into view it was met by a large cheer from the crowd, and they pushed towards him, and gave him pats on the back. If Roman soldiers had been present, there would have been no question as to which man of the traveling party was their target.

His appearance was not unlike any other young man of the time, nothing striking or different. Except perhaps his skin was darker, having clearly seen much more sun, his shoes were well worn from endless travel, and his free-flowing jet black hair and dishevelled beard was tangled and in need of care.

He made his way closer and closer to where the team stood, stopping regularly to impart words to someone from the crowd and look into their eyes with a serene gaze.

When he was mere metres away, a beggar woman tugged at his arm and began to cry. He smiled warmly at her.

The peasant wailed and fell to her knees. He answered her in a very casual manner, addressing his response to the whole crowd. He then hugged her and moved onward with his arm around her.

“What did he say?” asked Jude, noticing the crease forming between Irene's eyebrows.

Irene translated for the team. “She said she is a poor woman and asked him to pray to God above for riches. He replied:

“If those who lead you say to you, 'See, the kingdom is in the sky,' then the birds of the sky will precede you. If they say to you, 'It is in the sea,' then the fish will precede you. Rather, the kingdom is inside of you, and it is outside of you. When you come to know yourselves, then you will become known, and you will realise that it is you who are the sons of the living father. But if you will not know yourselves, you dwell in poverty and it is you who are that poverty.

“That's a quote attributed to Jesus Christ in the Gospel According to Thomas - a non-canonical scripture discovered in the Nag Hammadi library, in Egypt.”

“Is he quoting Jesus Christ, or is it common theology?” asked Jude.

The fanfare seemed to disappear as Yēšûă moved down the road.

“I don't think he is quoting Jesus Christ,” said Irene turning to the soldiers. “It is too early for people to be quoting Jesus.” She paused, and although the revelation visibly washed over their faces, she said it anyway.

“He is Jesus Christ.”

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Friday, 7 September 2012

Chpt. 4 - Don't Shoot the Messenger


Irene pressed the folders and files Alexander had given her to her chest, eyes down at her feet as she scuttled through the corridors towards the briefing room, all the while berating herself for the choice she was about to make.
As she turned the corner, she crashed into someone coming equally fast in the opposite direction, spilling all the folders and files across the floor.  Irene’s line of vision shot up and she caught her breath.
That someone was Jude Stone, the leader of the field team.
“Next time watch where you are going, soldier, and don’t…” she muttered to herself, swallowing hard, her deep brown eyes flicking between his eyes and the files splayed out on the polished timber.
He glared at her, looking her up and down with contempt.
“I guess we both weren't looking where we were going.  Too preoccupied with our thoughts, hey?”  She shone a quick, polite smile before bending down to pick up her files.
Jude Stone didn't respond.  Instead he just peered at her, chewing his gum rhythmically, before pushing past and continuing on his way.
She glanced back at him as he made his way in the opposite direction.
“Idiot,” she muttered under her breath.
Irene picked up her papers and files, and made her way to the briefing room.  As she walked into the small office, one of the security personnel closed and locked the door behind her.
Inside was a solid-wood oval table with Alexander and seven of the soldiers she saw yesterday seated around it.  There were two spare seats.
Irene searched the stone faces of the soldiers.  Jude was the only team member missing.
“Sit anywhere you like,” Alexander sighed, gesturing to the two spare seats.  “I was just introducing you to the team.”
There was a silence, so Alexander spoke again.  “This is the team bar the almighty leader, Mr. Stone, who had to rush out and tend to something.  Do not worry, doctor, he will still be on the mission.”
“I think he didn't like the fact you recruited someone without our okay, Lord Cartwright,” chuckled Spider.  “Especially appointing someone who's not even part of the forces.”
Irene sat on the seat at the end of the table and opened a folder.  Her ears burned.  She took a few deep breaths, and then focused on sifting through her prepared documents with quivering hands.
“In the next mission, you will be very thankful for Doctor Hadar and her expertise,” Alexander swallowed.  “I do not think Mr. Stone understands how respected a researcher she is in her field.  He would treat her much differently if he did.”
Spider leaned forward and pointed a finger at Alexander.  “I don't think you understand what it's like in our field.  Each one of these boys brings something to the table we actually need in completing a mission.  And we rely on each of these parts to keep us alive. 
“This woman is not just going to hold us back, her lack of training, Lord Cartwright, will put each member at risk.  That's why Jude stormed out.  No offence, doctor, but one wrong step and someone could die.”
“Excuse me gentlemen, perhaps I can introduce myself as Lord Cartwright had previously offered.  It is probably appropriate given the partnership we find ourselves in, although I do condition that formality by saying I wish not to form any real relationships with any of you, and have no intention of winning the respect of the ‘boys' club’.  I'll leave that to the yard spitters and booze guzzlers,” Irene interrupted, looking at the two men in between setting out documents on the desk.  “My not wanting to socialise with you all is no  reflection on any of your individual characters, which I am sure sparkle like diamonds and drip with charm.  It is, in truth, rather an unfortunate bias formed by the aggregation of military personnel I have previously encountered.  And had the misfortune to tolerate the company of.  An unfounded bias, no doubt, but a bias all the same.
The men glared back at her in varied states of confusion.
“My name is Doctor Irene Hadar.  The letters after my name won't mean anything to you, as a soldier ... just as the lettered agencies you served under mean nothing to me ... so I'll get straight on to why I am here.  Your next mission is to go back to the year 31 A.D., in what is now modern-day Palestine.  I believe many of you have been posted there before in more modern times.
“There your task will be to take out a revolutionary connected with the Zealots, an underground resistance group.  I believe Mr. Stone was to brief you all, but as he has had some other business to tend to, I'm more than happy to.  It will perhaps be refreshing for you all to have a leader in the field talk to you about your next destination, and I invite you to ask questions regarding the time period at the end if you would like to learn more.
“The revolutionary we are to locate goes by the name of Yēšûă, or what can be anglicised as Joshua. 
"According to the research notes Alexander has provided me, collated by an adequately impressive research team, Yēšûă never raised arms in his time, preferring to travel throughout the region spreading insidious ideas that incited violence and led to countless deaths for centuries to come.  After a failed attempt at killing him by the Roman Empire, he left for Asia and possibly lived out the rest of his life in Kashmir, India. 
"Yēšûă must not be killed in public view as this will create a martyr, which will only fan the fire of his words.  In fact, he may well wish to be made a martyr.”
“Sounds like a standard job for us, babe,” sniggered a marine with a bent nose and bushy eyebrows.  “We don't need any textbooks to tell us how to make someone disappear without a trace.”
“If you did, I wouldn't expect any of you would be here.”  She smiled, satisfied the backhanded compliment would be lost on the men.
“The difficulty with taking out Yēšûă is that his group stay underground most of the time,” continued Irene.  “The only time he can usually be found is during his public lectures when he comes to a town.  These are kept secret until the last moment, as he had a significant amount of Roman gold coins on his head.
“And it seems he used a myriad of underground passages and supporters in every village who helped hide and protect him.
“There is not much accurate information regarding his whereabouts at any point in history, however the researchers have narrowed down one window of opportunity.  A location and time period with an 84% historical probability.”
“Can't that hologram web tell us where he is?” asked Spider.
“Despite Alexander's confidence in his new toy, I spoke with the research team and they revealed they couldn't fully harness its power yet.  They can access likely probabilities, but nothing they glean is 100% foolproof.
“On top of that, they tell me you only have one opportunity.  Once you travel to a specific timeSpider glanced about the room and sniggered.  "Thanks for the history lesson, Doc, but we'll do better without you.  Believe it or not, accomplishing a mission like this needs a lot of high-level training."
Doctor Hadar paused and handed out pages with the basic elements of the mission.  “If you want someone to help you track down a man who will be harder to find than Osama bin Laden and Where's Wally's adopted love child, you might want someone who knows the terrain, knows the customs, and can speak Aramaic, Hebrew, Greek and Latin.  It's your choice, Spider.  Just say the word and I'll get back on my plane out of here, and leave the babysitting of marines to somebody else.  I have a very important dig on the other side of the planet that I'm happy to go back to.”
Everyone looked at Spider.
“You are a feisty one, aren't you?"  He smiled.  "I guess it's up to me then, since that pretty boy Jude ain't here,” he added.  He looked at the document Irene had handed him.  “He ain't going to be happy about it, but I guess we could do with more intel than a few bullet points on a page.  Just do as we say or you'll end up dead.”

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Monday, 20 June 2011

Can too many book editors or artistic opinions spoil the creative brew?


The idea behind this blog article can be adapted to anything, whether you're writing a story, or creating art, or creating anything artistic - but since I've just finished my first novel and everybody wants to be my editor (which I'm thankful for), I'll use a book as an example.

Say you're writing a book (if you're confused because you are not writing a book, read the above paragraph again).

You've put a generous proportion of character development. Put a sprinkle of romance in it. A dash of action. Two cups of intrigue. You've mixed it around, and have let it sit. It is now ready for you to put it in the oven and have people look over your story.

We are still talking about writing a book right? Yes, and I'm glad you bared with me with my over-the-top extended metaphor. Are we talking about a cook book? No, forget the whole cooking thing. Then why did you start talking about cooking? (Excuse me, I'm just having one of my multiple personality moments.) I'm hungry.

Where were we? I have been sidetracked... a feature of this unedited blog apparently.

Now you've got people looking over your work, critiquing and giving advice. Question on your lips is, or sign-languaging hands for those who cannot speak... can you ask too many? Survey says... The plain and simple answer is yes but no but yes but no - to quote a few television shows in one mash-up sentence.

It's great to get different perspectives and ideas (and grammar checks) from willing participants, but the caveat on that is that they are the cooks, and you are the chef. The iron chef with the iron fist.

You use your cutting knife (probably iron too) adding some suggestions and cutting others. So although they are integral to the editing process, do not change your story if it doesn't feel right to you. Or change your artistic vision. Or your art piece. Or whatever.

It is ALWAYS your work, not theirs... however this leads me to...


Two words of warning.

Well, two points of warning. I couldn't summarise each point in one word.

One, don't take offence to what they say.

Everyone has different tastes and sometimes they'll have an opinion that you don't have. That's okay. Doesn't mean your books sucks, or that is must be changed to their liking. (They'd probably tell me enough of the cooking analogy Daniel. You should really have got this blog entry edited. In which I'd answer, "I'm hungry and I don't know why.")

And then there will be people who just never like your work, or the fact you are doing that work. There are many reasons people won't like what you do, and none of them are really ever about you or your work. For example, I find people often tell me I can't do things when they really fear that it will reflect badly on them and what they have achieved in their lives.

And, as I always say (to myself in the mirror with the door closed), if you want to be something different or more than those around you, you have to think and do differently than them. So thinking differently to those around you is the first step in moving forward.

Don't get me wrong, your editors will always (most likely... probably... maybe... perhaps) be well meaning. But subconsciously they won't want you to make them look bad. Success and being different scare most ordinary folk.


And that leads me to my second point...

Two, don't fight over what they say.

It's futile for one. They probably think what they're saying is correct no matter what you say, but more importantly, you should never have to justify your reasons. Does Lady Gaga defend her cigarette glasses, or Michael Jordan ever defend why he wears Nikes, or Charlie Chaplin ever defend why he never spoke? (I hope I'm making you laugh as much as I'm making myself laugh!)

Point being, because you're a genius, or a genius in the making, you don't explain - that's for critics to ponder. Just ask me why I can think that and watch me not justify it because I'm a mother flippin' genius - and so are you - yes, you.


Always thank them for their advice, but you don't have to ever say you'll take it all on baord!

Thank them, use what you want, don't use what you don't want. You may ask them for clarification, but don't go to war with them on why your artistic idea is right and their opinion is wrong. It's an easy equation.

Y x (A + T) x (G - R) = S

Y = Your Work
A = Ask
T = Thank
G = Good Advice
R = Rubbish Advice
S = Success, or sexiness personified

So don't go to war with your editors. Just thank them, and don't take it personally because your art is all about YOU.

(On a side note, if a young Hitler's art pieces had been more accepted we may not have had War World Two so... case in point. And who knows, Ghengis Khan was probably spanked when he did finger painting at pre-school.)

And take a look at it from your editor friend's side of the table. If they feel attacked for opening up with their opinion they'll never give you advice again (and I need people to check my spelling and grammar).

These two points are hard to follow, especially since you've put your soul into your story, but essential to a writer or artist.


Last Thoughts...

Never worry about whether people will like what you've done. I have always found that if you throw yourself completely into your artistic expression, are passionate about it and making it the best possible piece, and love it with all your heart, the world is a big enough place that there will be plenty of people who will support you.

On a side note, one month until my novel is out! :-) Just in case you are one of the people who are going to support ME and buy it!